The Perfect Beginning

As I’ve mentioned before on this blog, this month I’m writing a short story, for submission to a romance anthology. It’s been a long time since I’ve written a short story, because I’ve been busy writing contracted novels for Spice; I paused a couple of times, and started stories, but didn’t finish them.

This past weekend I began remembering how writing short stories is different from writing novels. When I say short story, I mean less than 10,000 words. The guidelines for this particular anthology call for a minimum of 6,000 words, and I don’t plan to go much longer than that. I want a lean, tight story. But to tell a whole story at that length, the beginning can’t meander.

The beginning has to be right for a short story.

Back in November, I started writing this particular story. It’s going to have both science fictional and historical elements. I began writing in first person, as the heroine argued with a colleague in order to give the reader worldbuilding and character information, and also setting up that she’d made several visits to the past. It was lively dialogue, and their discussion continued for about a thousand words. Warning, Will Robinson!

I realized that however interested I might be in the science-fictional background, I was giving the reader no reason to care about any of it. Not only had I delayed showing the reader what the heroine wanted, I hadn’t shown the hero at all. I’d spent nearly four pages not doing those things, which ostensibly were the reason for the story. So, slice. I started over.

After another brief stab at using first-person fell flat, I changed tracks. Enough with the fancy literary devices, I decided. I switched to third-person limited, the hero’s point of view. He’s in hospital, in the middle of a war, and he’s suffering, and he’s looking forward to a visit from a woman he’s met a few times before. He wants to move forward in the story. He’s a historical character, and doesn’t know his heroine is arriving out of science fiction. He’ll learn that bit by bit, and the reader will learn it with him. Hopefully, that will keep the reader interested much more than being told about the shiny future, no matter how much the telling was enmeshed in shiny dialogue.

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Snow Pictures!

We interrupt your regularly scheduled blog for pretty pictures of a snowstorm in Philadelphia, and its aftermath.







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My Favorite Girls Dressed as Boys – Fantasy Edition

Fantasy novels are rife with girls dressed up as boys. I’m not sure if it’s because there are so many female fantasy readers versus so many male fantasy heroes, or if it’s a result of a common romance-adventure trope sliding into its modern subgenre, or a combination of both, or neither.

Anyway, here are some of my favorites in the fantasy genre.

Ellen Kushner, The Privilege of the Sword: notable in that the heroine doesn’t really want to be dressed as a boy, and learn to fight with swords. This changes. I think this is one of the best examples of integrating cross-dressing into the novel as a whole, so it’s integral to characterization, plot, and theme. An excellent review by Yoon Ha Lee. Here’s another at Green Man Review.

Lynn Flewelling, The Bone Doll’s Twin: takes cross-dressing to an extreme. The heroine is magically disguised as a boy (to be the image of her dead twin) from the time she’s a baby; if it’s discovered she’s female, and might fulfill a prophecy, she’ll be killed. Until she’s a teenager, she doesn’t know what’s been done to her. It’s a dark novel with some horror elements, and I think the best of Flewelling’s work. The sequels, when the heroine has been returned to her own female form, are lighter in tone with a more epic fantasy feel.

Marion Zimmer Bradley, Hawkmistress!: I enjoyed this book a great deal in high school, but I suspect it might not hold up for me today. The heroine disguises herself as a boy and takes to the road, earning her keep using her telepathic gift with birds. I remember being very disappointed when her sex was discovered, and thought the novel suffered after that.

Tamora Pierce, Alanna: the First Adventure: a middle grade/young adult novel in which the title character takes her brother’s place in learning to be a royal page. A classic example of the form.

And let’s not forget Eowyn in J.R.R. Tolkien’s The Return of the King. It’s a small part of the whole, but a most satisfying part.

What about you?

Related Post: My Favorite Girls Dressed as Boys, Romance Edition.

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Alan Seeger, "Rendezvous"


Rendezvous

I have a rendezvous with Death
At some disputed barricade,
I have a rendezvous with Death
At some disputed barricade,
When Spring comes back with rustling shade
And apple-blossoms fill the air–
I have a rendezvous with Death
When Spring brings back blue days and fair.

It may be he shall take my hand
And lead me into his dark land
And close my eyes and quench my breath–
It may be I shall pass him still.
I have a rendezvous with Death
On some scarred slope of battered hill,
When Spring comes round again this year
And the first meadow-flowers appear.

God knows ’twere better to be deep
Pillowed in silk and scented down,
Where love throbs out in blissful sleep,
Pulse nigh to pulse, and breath to breath,
Where hushed awakenings are dear . . .
But I’ve a rendezvous with Death
At midnight in some flaming town,
When Spring trips north again this year,
And I to my pledged word am true,
I shall not fail that rendezvous.

–Alan Seeger

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Help the Project Auction

Help the Project is an auction to benefit the Virginia Avenue Project, a free afterschool arts and academics program in Los Angeles, California. 100% of participating children graduate from high school. 95% go on to college. 98% are the first person in their family to go.

“The Virginia Avenue Project mentors Los Angeles children and teenagers, teaching classes in theatre and other arts, tutoring them in academics, and partnering with them to create and perform original plays.

As grants for arts and education have been cut, we are in danger of losing our centerpiece program, the One-on-Ones, in which short plays are specially written for each kid to act in with a professional actor. We take them to summer camp to rehearse, then return to Los Angeles to put on a show.

This program changes kids’ lives… and it’s not happening this year unless we can raise $15,000 by mid-March.”

Want to be a pirate in my next book? Bid here. Bidding is open through midnight on February 28, 2010.

Go here to see what else is on offer!

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Teaser from The Duke & The Pirate Queen

Today, a teaser from The Duke & The Pirate Queen.

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Captain Imena Leung did her best to appear bored. The royal cutter’s first officer examined the papers she had handed over to the inspecting officer.

Chetri stood at her side, chewing mastic, hands clasped behind his back. He looked casual but was ready, she knew, to draw his knife at a moment’s notice. Several of her crew handled inconsequential tasks within easy distance; she’d been careful to order most of the younger sailors to stay below on the lower cargo deck. At the first sign of trouble, the cutter’s first officer and his boat crew would become hostages. If worst came to worst, she might also claim diplomatic immunity; anything to gain time.

She might also accidentally knock the officer down, for looking at her as if he’d like to pay for her services. A knife pressed to his genitals might give him more respect for women.

The officer peeled off the second sheet and returned it to her. Imena slid the page into its case. “As you can see, we’re in the employ of the Duke Maxime.”

“You were scheduled to remain in port for another week. Why did you depart early? Without a full cargo?”

He wasn’t looking at her face, but at her bosom, despite its being bound into a bodice and concealed beneath a loose shirt. She was careful to show no hint of emotion as she said, “Personal matters.”

“Personal matters that caused you to recall your crew from shore leave and vanish from the docks in the wee hours of the morning?”

“I wanted to catch the tide,” she said blandly. “Are we finished here?”

“I’m curious as to the nature of these personal matters.” He glanced up at her face, now, and smiled. He was a young man with bright teeth, symmetrical features, and glossy hair. He wouldn’t be used to being refused.

“You will remain curious, then,” she said. “Chetri, will you escort the officer to his boat? I need to speak with Bonnevie.” She turned toward the wheelhouse.

“Oh, come now,” the officer said, looking annoyed. “You could at least offer me a drink.”

Imena frowned. “That’s not required by law.”

The officer’s back stiffened. “I wasn’t aware you particularly cared for laws, Captain Leung.”

“I have no idea what you mean.” She felt Chetri ease closer to her.

“Everyone knows why His Grace hired you. You’re a pirate.”

Chetri’s blade whistled from its sheath, and he spat the mastic gum at the man’s feet. Imena blocked his arm without breaking the officer’s gaze. She heard movement, then settling, as the sailors realized there would be no fighting. “I was a privateer, in the service of my government.”

“It’s all the same to us. We’ve been keeping an eye on you.”

“Have you.” She pushed on Chetri’s arm until it lowered and he stepped back to sheathe his blade. “Unless you are accusing me of piracy now, you will leave my ship.”

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Belgian Soldiers

It’s been a while since I’ve posted a historical photo. I love this one of a group of Belgian soldiers, because there’s so much story there.

(You should be able to click on it to see a larger version that gives a better view of their facial expressions.)

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Breaking Chapters

Chapter breaks are a topic I can muse on indefinitely.

This is because, when it comes to writing, I am a geek.

I think chapter breaks have several purposes.

1. Chapter breaks tell you where to stop reading and go to sleep.
2. Chapter breaks give a guideline for the reader to tell her parent/child/spouse/friend when she’ll stop reading and pay attention to them. “Just one more chapter!”
3. Chapter breaks give a guideline to the author for when she can stop writing and go do something else.
4. Chapter breaks offer opportunities for cliffhangers, which in turn can give the writer the opportunity to cackle with glee and the reader the opportunity to curse and shake an impotent fist at the writer.
5. Chapter breaks are a way to organize the narrative.

I’ve tried several approaches to breaking chapters. The easiest was to decide each chapter would be about 5000 words long (roughly, twenty manuscript pages). That’s actually not a bad method to use, if you don’t follow it too slavishly. If the chapters one writes consistently turn out to be less or more than 5000 words, then the estimate can be revised. (The Duchess, Her Maid, The Groom and Their Lover had chapters more in the 3000 word range.) This wordcount estimate can be paired with an outline: for instance, each chapter given five scenes of about 1000 words each. Those sorts of limits can be used to help one get through the first draft.

Another approach, which I used when writing The Moonlight Mistress, was not to have chapter breaks, at least not initially. I had written a synopsis, but no outline. Instead, I had a list of scenes I needed to write, which I placed roughly in order. Then I began to write. I didn’t break the chapters until a large portion of the manuscript was written, at which point I noticed some sections were really long and others were really short. It wasn’t symmetrical, but…it worked better that way. I went through again, checking the action and dialogue for places that seemed like stopping points, sometimes tweaking a little to make them more like, well, chapter breaks.

The longest chapters, I found, were at the beginning, and featured two main characters. Other important characters didn’t show up until much later, and the reader might be fooled into thinking the first two characters were the only ones of importance. To introduce the reader to those other characters, I created semi-chapter breaks, which I labelled “interludes,” of very short length. I might have called them chapters. That probably would also have worked.

For The Duke and The Pirate Queen, I didn’t want to go through all that again. So I loosely set myself chapter breaks within my list of scenes. I did shift a few of them as the manuscript progressed, but for the most part, I assigned one set-piece per chapter.

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Short and Sweet

This month, I’ll be working on a short story for an anthology. I haven’t written any short stories in a really long time, but I ought to remember how.

So, why I am doing this instead of hurrying to complete my proposal for the second Spice novel on my contract?

First, because the editor asked me. I’ve sold him stories before, and we’ve had pleasant interactions online (we live in different countries, and have never met). I was pleased that he thought of me.

Second, because it’s a nice creative break. Having just written three novels in a row, I think focusing on a short story for a brief time will refresh my creativity. A change always helps with that.

Third, I’ve been interested in exploring the Crimean War. I’ve read one book about it and am reading another. I haven’t done nearly enough research for a novel, but I’ve done plenty for a short story.

Fourth, when I did a LiveJournal poll and queried my friends about what I should write (I made the original choices), the winning plot elements were “The Crimean War” and “time travel.” And that got me excited to start writing.

Finally, after weeks of thinking about this story in my backbrain, this weekend I finally had an idea for a key point. I can’t wait to start!

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German edition of The Duchess, Her Maid, The Groom and Their Lover

Want to read The Duchess, Her Maid, The Groom and Their Lover auf Deutsch?

You can now pre-order the German edition, Die Herzogin, ihre Zofe, der Stallbursche und ihr Liebhaber, scheduled to release August 1, 2010 from Mira Taschenbuch Im Cora Verlag, translated by Ira Severin.

“Herzogin Camille ist verzweifelt: Ihr grausamer Ehemann will sie umbringen, damit er sich eine junge, gefügige Frau suchen kann, die ihm endlich einen Erben schenkt. Statt tatenlos auf ihren Tod zu warten, entschließt Camille sich zur Flucht. Mit ihrem jungen Geliebten, dem Stallburschen Henri, und ihren ergebensten Dienern sucht sie Unterschlupf in Bordellen und gibt sich tabulosen körperlichen Freuden hin. Doch während sie noch lustvoll seufzt, sind ihnen die Männer des Herzogs bereits auf den Fersen….”

Victoria Janssen hat bereits mehr als dreißig erotische Kurzgeschichten unter ihrem Pseudonym Elspeth Potter veröffentlicht. Soweit sie weiß, ist sie die einzige Autorin, die jemals eine Geschichte geschrieben hat, in der menschenfressende Schildkröten vorkommen. Die Herzogin, Ihre Zofe, Der Stallbursche Und Ihr Liebhaber, ist Victoria Janssens erster Roman. Wenn sie nicht schreibt oder liest, gibt sie Workshops über das Schreiben und Verkaufen von erotischer Literatur.

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