Revision Metaphors


Sometimes I look back at what I’ve written in my zero draft. I see heaps of words lining the road. The heaps have shape, but they don’t yet have architectural value. They’re not smoothed and stacked. Sometimes I want to go back and tidy up those heaps, maybe build a little dome or pyramid for them to settle into. I have to wait until I’ve got a full manuscript before that will be a really useful thing to do. I won’t have an idea of the whole shape until I have a whole story.

Sometimes I think of the draft like a woven blanket. Revisions involve going in and tightening the weave, closing in gaps in plot and weaknesses of prose, pulling tighter and tighter until the novel is virtually waterproof. Sometimes I have to pull threads free altogether, and weave thread in different spots, then tighten again. Sometimes the new threads are in entirely new colors or textures. Sometimes, and this is most painful, I have to cut a section free and then mend the blanket around the whole, fixing every thread the excised section previously affected, thread by thread.

It’s all much easier when you’re working with something you already have. Hence the importance of the “crappy” draft. Even if it’s crappy, it still exists. You can’t edit a blank page.

Writing and editing are both difficult for me, but in completely different ways.

Related Posts: Revisions Take Time.

Digesting Critique.

Dissecting Critique, Dissecting Manuscripts.

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Food in Fiction

I like to put food in my fiction.

First of all, people eat. What they eat can say a lot about their character, and about the world in which they live, and about their interactions with other characters. Does Oscar make breakfast for Max? If so, does he make Max’s favorite (chocolate-frosted sugar bombs dipped in Nutella) or Max’s least favorite (kippers with catsup)? Does Oscar even know what Max likes? What does that say about them and their relationship?

Second, eating makes wonderful stage business. Several pages of straight dialogue can be broken up with the small actions of choosing an apple, washing it, peeling it. The food eaten and how it’s eaten can give clues about the character: someone nervous might fiddle with the apple, polishing and polishing, but not eating. Someone else, feeling friendly, might offer a bite of the apple to his companion. The speaker might be angry and focus on peeling her apple while not looking at her companion at all.

I once got into trouble with this. Every time the characters needed to talk, they were eating something, and they talked frequently. Mostly, they were eating and drinking the same thing, over and over. I ended up making a joke of it–the repetition became characterization–but it could easily have become tiresome, and probably was to some readers. Unless it’s a novel about eating, like Kit Reed’s Thinner Than Thou, the characters shouldn’t be eating all the time.

When revising Moonlight Mistress, I discovered that characters ate omelettes three times. Even though omelettes made sense on all three occasions, and the characters in the scenes varied, I changed one scene to crepes instead.

For putting realism into a scene, though, sometimes there’s nothing like food.

However, note that if the written food sounds really delicious, the reader might stop reading to go and eat.

Related Post: Moonlight Mistress excerpt, involving food..

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Reviews, the Sweetest Pain

“Your manuscript is both good and original, but the part that is good is not original and the part that is original is not good.” –Samuel Johnson

I think writers often worry too much about how their work will be perceived, or rather, how they imagine their work will be perceived, before it’s even finished. They worry about how other writers will see their work: hackwork, work of genius, cutting-edge, supreme prose-stylist, unputdownable.

And how will readers see it? Bland, nothing new, boring, not bad, entertaining, good fluff, best book ever. “I will never read this author again!” “This author is now an autobuy!” If you’re lucky, you’ll get both opinions in the same review. I can’t even remember how many times I’ve been pointed to wildly conflicting reviews of the same book. They might even both be right. A lot depends on the perspective from which the book is being viewed.

Worrying about it can stop you-the-writer in your tracks. It’s good to try and be a better writer, I would never argue that. But I think it isn’t generally a good thing to be too self-conscious about how one’s own prose is perceived by others, to the extent that one is paying more attention to what one imagines others will think than to what one is actually doing. Easier said than done, of course.

This is one reason why it’s probably a good thing to ignore reviews of your work. For the most part, I haven’t done this, but I keep thinking I ought to. Once the reviews arrive, I’m already done with the book, and have been done with it for almost a year, and have moved on. In fact, I might be done with the book after it, as well. By the time those reviews start showing up, good, bad, or indifferent, there’s nothing much I can do about the book.

“Writing is like sex. The more you think about it, the harder it is to do. It’s better not to think about it so much and just let it happen.” –Stephen King

We’ll see if I can take my own advice in the future. I fear I’m not strong enough to resist for long–even though any critique in reviews comes too late, there’s the draw of reading commentary on your work by someone who’s read it, and cared enough to write down their thoughts on it. This draw is very tempting when you’ve spent months with little or no feedback about the thing, the novel, that is consuming your life.

“If all critics agreed, only one of us would have a job.” –Mary Kalin-Casey

Related Post: Striving for Perfection.

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The Art of War – World War One Poster Art

Today’s post is what is sometimes referred to as “picspam.” I find WWI-era posters fascinating. Here are a few interesting ones. I’ll post some recruitment posters later this month.

Posters aimed at financing the war were very common. Here’s a German war bond poster.

Here’s one for the Russian liberty loan.

Money was needed for relief of refugees and other victims of the war.

This American War Bond poster is unusual because it’s a photograph rather than a painting.

Sentimental appeals were quite common.

Familiar figures were appropriated for the cause as well.

Appeals continued ever after the war ended.

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Edmund Blunden, "Can You Remember?"

Can You Remember?

Yes, I still remember
The whole thing in a way;
Edge and exactitude
Depend on the day.

Of all that prodigious scene
There seems scanty loss,
Though mists mainly float and screen
Canal, spire and fosse;

Though commonly I fail to name
That once obvious Hill,
And where we went and whence we came
To be killed, or kill.
Those mists are spiritual
And luminous-obscure,
Evolved of countless circumstance
Of which I am sure;

Of which, at the instance
Of sound, smell, change and stir,
New-old shapes for ever
Intensely recur.

And some are sparkling, laughing, singing,
Young, heroic, mild;
And some incurable, twisted,
Shrieking, dumb, defiled.

–Edmund Blunden

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Edward Thomas, "This Is No Case…"

This is no case of petty right or wrong
That politicians or philosophers
Can judge. I hate not Germans, nor grow hot
With love of Englishmen, to please newspapers.
Beside my hate for one fat patriot
My hatred of the Kaiser is love true:
A kind of god he is, banging a gong.
But I have not to choose between the two,
Or between justice and injustice. Dinned
With war and argument I read no more
Than in the storm smoking along the wind
Athwart the wood. Two witches’ cauldrons roar.
From one the weather shall rise clear and gay;
Out of the other an England beautiful
And like her mother that died yesterday.

Little I know or care if, being dull,
I shall miss something that historians
Can rake out of the ashes when perchance
The phoenix broods serene above their ken.
But with the best and meanest Englishmen
I am one in crying, God save England, lest
We lose what never slaves and cattle blessed.
The ages made her that made us from dust:
She is all we know and live by, and we trust
She is good and must endure, loving her so:
And as we love ourselves we hate our foe.

–Edward Thomas

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Jackie Barbosa Guest Post – Confessions of a Sub-Genre Slut

Please welcome my guest, Jackie Barbosa!

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Confessions of a Sub-Genre Slut

Before I get started, I’d like to thank Victoria for giving me a chance to blab about myself on her blog. Of course, the downside of guest blogging is that one has to think of something to blab about. Naturally, I procrastinated as long as possible, hoping I’d have a clever idea. Then, I reached the point where I couldn’t wait for a clever idea to come along, so I settled for something else.

Okay, first things first. I write romances. Dirty romances, although the degree of dirtiness does vary somewhat from story to story. As a reader, I like my romances hot and more than a little filthy, and that’s what I try to deliver as a writer, too.

But when I first started writing romance, I thought I’d confine myself to writing historical romances. My original critique partners laugh at me now, because I used to swear over and over again that I’d never have an idea for a contemporary romance. Or for a paranormal. Or (inconceivable), a YA. Nor did it occur to me that I’d ever venture into ménage or m/m.

Boy, have I learned. Never say never!

Now, it’s true, my print debut, Behind the Red Door, is definitely a historical romance and it’s pretty “straight,” as is the current proposal my agent is shopping for me. But somehow, on the way to writing those historical romances, I also wrote three contemporaries (two novellas and one short story, which isn’t even a romance—it’s pretty much straight erotica), a paranormal Christmas story, and a historical m/m/f ménage that’s probably one of my favorite stories I’ve ever written.

Even worse, I am starting now to have fantasies about writing a middle grade/YA series. I mean, it won’t even have SEX in it! What is the world coming to?

The truth, I’m afraid, is that I’m a sub-genre slut. I’ve realized that it’s not enough to do just one. I’ve got to do them all!

What about you? As a reader or a writer, do you stick to just a few sub-genres, or do you like to read/write across all of them with a complete lack of abandon (if not a lack of discrimination)? Do you have a favorite sub-genre, or is it more about the individual book? I’d love to know!

Please post your thoughts. I’ll draw from all the commenters and one lucky winner will receive a copy of Behind the Red Door and along with the ebook novella of his/her choice.

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Guestblogging at Romance Junkies


I’m guestblogging today at Romance Junkies about “Historical and Paranormal: Two Great Tastes That Taste Great Together.”

I’ll re-post it in this blog later on.

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How To Write A Novel (in 72 easy steps!)

I long ago came to the conclusion that the trickiest part of writing a novel is figuring out how you write novels. You being yourself, a particular author with a particular method of working. All writers know, or should know, there is no absolute right way to do anything. Every writer works in a different way, and I’ve heard others say every novel they write is written in a different way from the one before.

I think I’ve figured out what works for me. Note everything I say here is in reference to me. It may or may not apply to you.

I didn’t figure out my process until my third try at a novel. Each time I tried a different approach. (Incidentally, each of the three tries was a different genre, but I don’t think that has much bearing on what I’m saying here.)

The first time, I just started writing one evening, with no real plan, and then proceeded to polish that first chapter to within an inch of its life before I went on to another chapter, and so on. I got to a certain point and some of my readers pointed out many flaws with the plot, and after deciding I couldn’t fix them, I ditched several chapters and characters and started over from a spot in chapter two. I ditched large amounts of writing in search of a coherent plot, and kept trying to make the plot more and more complex so it would be “good.” Eventually, I had the beginning, a bit of the middle, and an ending of sorts; I’d gotten frustrated and written the high points of the story.

My lesson learned: If someone tells me to start over, even more than one someone, say no. Unless I truly hate what I’m working on, which has never been the case. Starting over leads to unneccesary complication and thus to confusion and eventual frustration. Perfection is elusive and won’t appear from banging my head against a wall.

Second try, I thought I’d go for a straightforward fantasy quest-style plot; that would be easier than science fiction taking place in two separate environments. I made up a very basic outline and some characters, and did a lot of research to use as the basis for my fantasy cultures, a new and exciting thing for me. I wrote an opening chapter. I wrote some other chapters. Some of my readers told me what was wrong and that I needed to start over from a different place in the story. All very true, but see above. I rewrote the opening couple of chapters at least three times, I can’t even remember now, and began to get bored. Then I decided to avoid all my confusion of the first try and made a detailed outline, breaking each chapter into five scenes that would be about a thousand words each, with a total of about fifteen chapters. I started writing to the outline. About chapter seven, I didn’t like the way things were heading. I didn’t need some of the stuff in the outline; it wasn’t working as I had thought it might. But if I didn’t stick to the outline, well, I wouldn’t have stuck to the outline. I ground ahead with the outline, bored and angry and dissatisfied. Then I stopped writing altogether.

My lesson learned: Once again, do not listen if someone tells me to start over. Do not outline in anal-retentive detail, because I don’t have the skill/practice to do so and take everything into account. I don’t know everything at the beginning, like some writers do. I cannot follow an outline rigidly, because I will become bored and feel I have no room for inspiration, and I will shove aside great ideas because they don’t fit in a pre-determined frame, feeling the whole time like I’ve killed something.

My third try was a historical novel. I had collected a lot of information about WWI some years before I started the fantasy novel, and had some characters, but they were in search of a plot and also I thought a historical would be too difficult to write. I put the notebook of research aside. A few years later, I joined a new workshop, the one which eventually became The Nameless Workshop.

Then I started thinking about the characters again, and wrote a scene for two of them. Then I tried to write a short story using the few ideas I had. I workshopped the short story and got excellent comments. I applied them and the story still didn’t coalesce. A reader suggested it needed to be a romance, an idea I’d considered in the beginning but then put aside because I wrote science fiction and fantasy. Apparently, I also wrote romance, too. Sort of. (Back then, I hadn’t read much Romance, but now I have, and have gained a clearer idea of the genre.)

My method with this novel was based on something I learned at the very first meeting of the new workshop, which was [drumroll] Give yourself permission to write shit. This is not as easy as it sounds, but if accomplished, can be very freeing, like I imagine Zen archery feels. It involves writing the whole draft before even allowing myself to consider going back and changing anything. So, I did that. And I think it’s my method.

In more detail: I didn’t outline, beyond knowing in my head where the characters came from and where I wanted them to end up. I wrote many chapters of draft with practically no plot in them while I figured things out about the characters and what plotlike things I could do with them in future. I allowed myself to have fun, and when I wasn’t having fun, I looked forward to the next fun bit as a reward. I reminded myself not to be scared (it didn’t always work, but I tried). When I felt like I needed structure, I made a vague mental outline of four chapters or so at a time. I kept writing, no matter what. Major changes were forbidden until the rewrite.

My lesson learned: this is the method for me! It’s fun! I feel smart! I laugh in the face of outlines! I figure things out as I go along! It’s the perfect method for my somewhat convoluted thinking patterns. At least for that novel, it was. *sigh*

I still follow this method, though since I am writing novels under contract now, I construct a synopsis and possibly an outline while I’m in the early stages. The key for me is knowing what to leave vague in the synopsis, so I can have fun figuring it out later, and also allowing myself to bend the synopsis if that best serves the story. While the manuscript is in progress, I also usually keep a list of scenes, so when I start writing each day, I don’t have the excuse of not knowing what I need to write next. This method seems to be working so far.

The answer to how you can learn to to write a novel is, in my opinion, write a novel. And then, write another one.

Related Post: Zero Drafting.

The Art of Letting Go: Finishing the Novel.

Novel Beginnings: On Opening Sentences.

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Minx Malone Guest Post – Inspiration

Thanks, Victoria, for allowing me to hang out with you today. I wanted to talk about something that is equally relevant for writers and readers alike: inspiration.

I used to be inspired mainly by dreams. I would wake up one day with a great idea or find myself daydreaming at work (bad, I know!) and come up with a new book title that rocked. I never questioned where these ideas came from until recently. I found myself wondering where exactly my subconscious mind was getting these ideas and even more importantly, what would I do if the ideas stopped?

It sparked an interesting question – what inspires me? What is it that excites me, intrigues me, challenges me enough to create something new? When I’m in the midst of writing I can’t analyze where the creativity comes from all I can do is be happy it’s there. But over time I’ve been able to identify a few things that help the muse along.

1) Google – strange as it seems, being able to find information about anything and everything has sparked my creativity a time or two. I’ve read some weird things on the Internet which have led to unusual plot twists or just interesting background info.

2) Other People – I’ve heard some juicy snippets of conversation just standing in line at the supermarket or waiting in the post office. People on cell phones apparently think no one else can hear them :)

3) Work – a lot of writers refer to their day job as the “dreaded day job” but I enjoy mine. Sharing gossip with coworkers has led to many interesting ideas, the most recent of which is my new series Desire Incorporated.

I got my idea for the Desire Incorporated series while helping out with a filing project at work. Even though the filing wasn’t fun, it definitely sparked some fun ideas about the kind of company we’d ALL love to work for. The first book in the series is about a temporary assistant named Ava.

Ava Kincaid took the temporary job at Desire Incorporated because she desperately needed the money, not because she was secretly hoping to see her ex-boyfriend Gavin Sloan again. She’s already been there, done that and gotten kicked in the teeth. She just wants to do her job and go home.

But when they meet up in the halls of Desire, the chemistry between them is as strong as ever. Suddenly she’s doing way more than filing…

I loved writing this book and was actually sad to see it end. So now I’m writing a second book set in the same universe called The Intern. Not sure what inspired that one but probably just my desire to spend time with the characters I’ve come to love so much.

Sometimes we are inspired by the strangest things. But no matter what inspires you, use it to fulfill your dreams and appreciate that inspiration for what it is.

A gift.

Minx

P.S. I’m hosting a contest this month at my website. Everyone who signs up for my newsletter will be entered for a chance to win a copy of The Temp. So come on over and sign up for regular updates about the mischief I get into!

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